Essay 9 outline

Out Line

Bell word-depressed

Paragraph 1

Carton is one of the most dynamic characters

He is a very sad and depressed man

Has a drinking problem

Needs to get some help.

Paragraph 2

TS- Carton is described many times, mostly negative

SD-"useless [...] piece of furniture, tolerated for its old service, and taken no notice of."

CM- Harsh simile to describe Carton

CM-It may be blunt, but its true in some ways

SD-“ Mr. Carton, who had so long sat looking at the ceiling of the court, changed neither his place nor his attitude, even in this excitement”.

CM-Carton is a person who isn’t affected by excitement

CM- He just sits there, not moving, stuck in his own world

SD- “I am a disappointed drudge, sir. I care for no man on earth, and no man on earth cares for me.”

CM-Carton has no self confidence

CM- He is depressed and has a drinking problem

CS- Carton is a depressed drunk, who needs a boost of self confidence

Paragraph 3

TS-To get Carton back to a healthy state, he needs to follow some steps

SD- Stop drinking

CM- Drinking is main root to his problems

CM- If he would stop, no more depression

SD-Needs to stop feeling bad for himself

CM- Needs to get some self confidence,[..]” Maybe we should chug on over to mamby pamby land where maybe we can find some self confidence for you”[..](R. Lee Ermey, Geico commercial)

CM- He has a fine life, he needs to find self confidence

SD- Lastly, you should not work with Stryver

CM-Stryver only degrades you more

CM-He is the worst person to be around

CS- Carton needs to follow these steps

Paragraph 4

I think if Carton stops drinking he will be fine

He needs to change around his daily life

May have to make a few sacrifices

Sam

12/14/10

English

Mr. Salsich

Cartons Hidden Skeletons:

An Essay about Carton and His Problems

Sydney Carton is one of the most dynamic characters in the book A Tale of Two Cities. He is a sad and depressed man that doesn’t carry his head high. Carton also has a drinking problem which is one main reason he is such a wreck. Carton needs to seek help and change his unhealthy lifestyle as soon as he can.

TS-Throughout the book, Carton the man with many problems, has mainly been described in downbeat and depressing ways(alliteration).(appositive) SD- Carton is always the person that is never liked by others, he is like a “Useless piece of furniture, tolerated for its old service and taken no notice of”. (Dickens)CM-This comment made by Darnay to describe Carton is a pretty harsh comment that was not needed that hurt Carton, that should not have been said.(polysyndeton CM- His comment may be blunt, but it’s the truth. SD-Carton is the type of person that is like a stone statue, “Mr. Carton, who had so long sat looking at the ceiling of the court, altered(fast) neither his place nor his attitude, even in this excitement”. CM- Even in the mitts of exhilaration(fast) Carton is the type of person who isn’t affected. CM- He just sits there, not moving, stuck in his own world. SD- Lastly, Carton has no self confidence, “I am a disappointed drudge, sir. I care for no man on earth, and no man on earth cares for me”. This quote proves that Carton has no self confidence. Because of his low self confidence he is a miserable man(alliteration) who has a drinking problem. CS- Carton is a dejected drunk who needs a boost of self confidence.

TS- To get Carton back to a healthy state, he should follow some simple steps.(Alliteration) SD-First off, Carton needs to stop drinking. CM-Drinking is what gets him into his depressed moods, drinking is the main root to all his problems, drinking is destroying his life. CM- If he would stop drinking he would start to feel better, his misery would go away, and he would become healthier.. SD- Furthermore, Carton needs to stop feeling bad for himself and gain some self confidence. CM- Finding some poise(fast) shouldn’t be a big deal for a grown man, [..]”Maybe we should chug on over to mamby pamby land where maybe we can find some self confidence for you”[..](R. Lee Ermey, Geico Commercial) CM-If Carton heard this line I am sure he would stumble upon some self confidence.(Alliteration) SD- Another way carton can get back to a healthy state is by not working with Stryver. Stryver only talks Carton down, filling his head with disheartening comments, making him feel worse about himself, like a drill sergeant breaks down his men.(Coordinate Cumulative With Simile) CM- When Carton is with Stryver he rapidly (fast) looses all his pride, after all he is the jackal. CS- These adjustments would be very difficult for him to follow, and would take some time, and would be hard work, but after some time Carton would be a transformed person.(polysyndeton)

I believe if Carton would just stop drinking he would be a healthy energetic person that everybody enjoys to be around. He desperately needs to make some changes in his daily life. Along with making changes he will have to make some sacrifices as well, like drinking.

I think I did very well on essay 9. This could be my best essay of the year so far. I checked it over coutless times to make sure there were no errors. I carefully thought out each sentence and carefully blended the quotes. I think on the essay I deserve a B.

Sam
11/16/10
Mr. Salsich
English
Essay 8 outline
Paragraph #1
HOOK- How can a person split a ray of light?
CM-Or how does a whole world lie in a twinkling star?
CM-Thinking the way Dickens did, can be tricky business
Thesis- In this difficult writing there is many meanings
Paragraph #2
TS- This paragraph is extremely confusing and difficult to read, but it is filled with great meaning.
SD- This world is huge, (quote about France compared to sky)
CM- The sky is enormous; France is a small sliver of it
CM-This indicates that Dickens was comparing things
TS-I think the main point of the paragraph is, the world is huge, what’s beyond it is even bigger, us humans are not nearly as intelligent as we should be
CM- If France is a sliver of the sky, then the earth is just a twinkling star in all of space
CM- If the earth is just small sliver of space, then we most likely are not the most intelligent, (quote about human knowledge)
Echo- signify, indicate
Paragraph #3
TS- Paragraph has a lot of advice and meaning behind it
SD- The idea about not knowing everything
CM- Some people think they know everything, but they are 1 in 7 billion people
CM-They are a blade of grass in a field
SD- I often find myself in my own world
CM- But there is much more to Mystic, Connecticut
CM-I cant wait to expand my world and step out of my box
Paragraph #4
I think people get to wrapped up in their own lives
They don’t know what else is out there
It doesn’t matter if its around the country, world, space, people need to broaden their lives.

Sam

11/29/10

English

Mr. Salsich

What Lies Beyond:

An Essay On a Paragraph Dickens Wrote

Have you ever wondered what is beyond earth? What else could possibly be out in space? I think these questions are some of the most baffling. Space is huge and earth is a minute piece of it.

The paragraph on page 183 in Tale of Two Cities, is possibly one of the most puzzling. SD- This world is huge: “Thousands of acres of land- a whole province of France- all of France itself- lay under the night sky, concentrated into faint hair-breadth line."(Dickens, pg 183)CM- Dickens is saying, the sky is enormous and France is a small sliver and in the bigger picture, earth is a small sliver of the colossal(fast) universe. SD- The main point of the paragraph was that we humans are too big for our britches. CM- If France is just a sliver of the sky, than earth is just a twinkling star in a huge universe. CM- I think the human race thinks they are so smart and ahead of our time, “And as mere human knowledge can split a ray of light and analyze the manner of its composition, so sublime intelligences may read in feeble shining of this earth of ours”.(appositive) CS- Overall, the world is big, we humans are smart, but space is massive, there are bound to be more advanced planets.

This paragraph relates to my life and the world of 2010. SD- The idea about not knowing everything applies not only to the paragraph but my life as well. CM- Some people think they know everything, but they are one in seven billion people. CM- They are like a blade of grass in a massive field. SD-I often find myself in my own minute(fast) world, oblivious to what is around me. CM- However, there is much more than Mystic, Connecticut. CM- I can’t wait to expand my world, step out of my box, and expand my knowledge of the world.(coordinate) CS-Its human nature to assume(fast) you’re superior, but you can never be the best; there are just too many people.

Just like France is a small sliver of earth, earth is a small sliver of space. We humans have no clue what else lies out in that dark endless hole we call space. If there is life on other planets we humans are most likely not the most advanced. So what is beyond earth? This question will linger in my head for some time.

Graphic Organizer for Essay 7

Peace Opening-

1- What does peace mean to you?

2- Peace can mean many different things to many different people all around the world.

3- Possibly peace means, no fighting, or maybe being at peace with yourself.

4- Peace takes place in TOTC, a poem, and your own life

What Peace Means to Me-

1- Peace takes on many shapes and forms in my personal life

2- A place I always find peace is my ipod

3- At night my music carries me away from troubles

4- While listening I am at peace with myself

5- Peace also means no war and violence

6- If people would drop their weapons and jump on the peace train we would all be home soon

7- There is too much hate and anger in the world

8- Lastly, I can find peace when I am happy

9- Finding happiness in life is key to bringing peace

10- When I am at home with my friends and family having a fun time

11- Peace can be achieved not only by yourself, but by the world

Peace in TOTC

1- In book TOTC not much peace

2- However, Lucy being reunited with Dr. Manette

3- They were truly happy

4- Peace can be achieved through pure happiness

5- Also, the Marquis being killed

6- No more suffering for poor

7- This dictator that harmed the people is gone

8- Lastly, Carton is a pretty good example of piece

9- Despite his extremely low self confidence he is a extremely laid back guy

10- He is not pushy and cocky like Stryver, he just lets stuff roll off his back

11- Even in this dark book peace can be found

1- In my life and in TOTC peace can be found

2- It can come in many different shapes and forms

3- In time I think the world and TOTC will hopefully find peace

Sam

11/3/2010

English

Mr. Salsich

An Essay about Peace:

In My Life and Tale of Two Cities

What does peace mean to you? Peace can mean many different things to many different people. Possibly peace means no fighting, or possibly it means being at peace with yourself. Peace takes place in my own life, A Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning.

Peace takes on many shapes and forms in my life. A place I can always find peace is at night when I listen to my ipod. Music always finds a way to carry me away from the troubles of the day. When I am listening to my ipod-- I am calm and have no worries.(Verb Appositive) I am at peace with myself. Peace could also mean no wars and violence in the world. If humans could all drop their weapons and jump on the peace train, we would all be home soon. There is too much hate and anger in the world for no reason. Because of all the violence and hate, innocent people have to suffer. Lastly, I can always find peace outside; whether it’s the beach, mountains, or the river. (appositive) Being outside and away from everyday problems is a great way for me to find peace. Finding peace with myself can sometimes be a difficult thing, always trying to find ways to escape my dilemmas, digging deep for a little sanity, like a oil drill digs for oil. (cumulative sentence with a metaphor.)

In the book Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning, there really isn’t too much peace. However, Lucy being reunited with Dr. Manette is a great example of peace. When father and daughter were reunited after twenty years they were both truly happy--embarrassing each other in their arms.(Verb Appositive) According to the Dalai Lama, peace can be achieved through happiness. Also, the Marquis being killed can be perceived as an example of peace. The Marquis being murdered wasn’t peaceful, but because he died there will be no more suffering for the poor. This appalling (thesaurus word) dictator had harmed innocent people for years. Lastly, in the poem, A Rainy Morning, peace can be found in the lady. Even though this lady is in a wheel chair she is at peace with herself. She is not harming anyone, and she is not mad at the way she is. In my life, Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning, peace can be found in the rarest places.

In order for the world to be a safe and peaceful place, people need to find happiness. Why must people fight over things not worth fighting for? Start off by finding peace in your own life, finds a place where you are tranquil, find a place where you are calm, find a place where you are truly happy.

I think this is one of my better essays. I really took the time to check it over for mistakes. I am hoping I do not have one grammatical errors. I also tried my best on the special sentences. I feel I have met the requirements for them. Overall I took my time, and carefully thought out each sentences. I think I deserve a B- for this essay.

Essay 6 oraganizer

Main Point- Looking Beyond The Mirror

Bell Word- See

Paragraph One-

Hook- What do you see when you look into a mirror?

Comment- When most people look in the mirror they think of physical appearance

Comment-But some may think how cool, or pathetic they are.

Thesis- A lot of people have different perspectives

Paragraph 2-

TS- In TOTC, Lucie, Doc, and Mr. Lorrey all think different of themselves.

Echoes: Gaze, observe

SD- When Lucie gazes into mirror, she notices an attractive women

CM-Carton reveres to her as the “golden doll”.

Cm-Also Miss. Pross raves about her

SD-The doctor may observe his lost life before him

CM-Feeling sorrow for himself

C M-I think most people would feel bad too

SD- Mr. Lorrey may see a man of strict business

CM- Always dressed for success

CM- A older man filled with wisdom

CS- Depends on person

Paragraph 3-

Echoes- glance, notice

TS- I see a lot of things in mirror

SD- At first glance, I notice physical appearance

CM- I stay fixated on all my cons

CM-Then I may notice my pros

SD-Also see my feelings

CM- notice a person that is shy

CM-Wishing I was bold

SD-But sometimes I come out of my shell

CM-Saying to myself that I really need to work on being not shy

CM-Gaining some more self confidence every day

CS- Many pros and cons, need work

Paragraph 4-What do you see when you look in the mirror?

Echo- see

Comment- Do you see a bold person

Comment-or perhaps a ugly person

Restatement- Everyone has a perspective of themselves, either negative or positive.

Sam

10/21/10

English

Mr. Salsich

What Do You See In the Mirror?:

A Essay About What You See When You Look In the Mirror

What do you see when you look into the mirror? When most people look into the mirror they look right at their physical appearance, but others may see their character and actions. Everybody has a different perspective when they look at themselves in the mirror.

TS- In the book Tale of Two Cities, Lucie, Doctor Manette, and Mr. Lorrey all think different of themselves. SD- When Lucie gazes into a mirror, she sees an attractive young women who is liked by many. CM- Mr. Carton is one of her biggest followers and refers to her as “golden doll”. CM- Also, Miss Pross praises her and talks about how no man is worthy of her but her brother. SD When Doctor Manette observes himself in a mirror, he may see a man that has lost twenty years of his life from being held captive. CM- He feels bad for himself because of all the time he has lost with his family. CM- Doctor Manette was robbed from spending time with his loved ones. SD- Mr. Lorrey may see a man of strict business. CM- He is a man that is always dressed for success, never grey, always telling it how it is with no sugar coating. CM- He states he has no feelings, only caring about his business.CS- You look into the mirror, a quick glance is all it takes, a different perspective every day, some days happy with how you look, other days sad about how you look.

When I look into the mirror I see a lot of things, dozens of thoughts streaming through my mind. SD- At first glance I immediately notice my physical appearance, which is filled with pros and cons.CM- Always staying fixated on my acne for too long; wasting my time on something that isn’t worth the hassle.CM- I then notice the positives things, like my height, which always gives me a boost of self confidence. SD- Moving onto detecting my character traits, I see a boy that is extremely shy, always having trouble to come out from underneath his shell, living in his own world where everything is safe and sheltered, trying hard to pull himself out of his safety zone.(subordinate cumulative sentence) CM- I wish I was not a shy person that stays within his shell.CM- I sometimes feel jealous of people who are not shy and can just be themselves.CM- SD- Being envious of other people is the last thing I see when I look into the mirror. CM-When I look at certain people I tend to admire their possessions.CM- For some reason, I believe having material items will somehow enrich my life with happiness. CS- If I wouldn’t worry so much about how I look, or how fancy my life style is, I could realize happiness comes with the simple things life has to offer.

If you looked into the mirror, would you see a bold or outgoing person? Or perhaps a shy, modest person, that is unhappy with how they look. Everyone has a different outlook of themselves, either negative or positive.

I think this could possibly be my best essay of the year. I really took the time to check it over for mistakes. I am hoping I do not have one grammatical errors. I also tried my best on the special sentences. I feel I have met the requirements for them. Overall I took my time, and carefully thought out each sentences. I think I deserve a B for this essay.

essay 5

Sam

English

Mr. Salsich

10/12/10

What Would You Do?:

An Essay About Finding a Lost Parent After Twenty Years.

Being separated from any parent for 20 years and thinking they had died would be hard enough. But then being told they are alive and asked if you want to see them would be an exciting event. I think that moment would be the happiest of my life.

TS- In chapter six of A Tale of Two Cities, Lucie Manette meets her father for the first time in twenty years, Dickens has a number of ways to portray the emotions of this event. SD-One way Dickens shows these emotions is by using suspense. CM- Throughout this chapter the shoemaker inched closer and closer to finally realizing that Lucie Manette was indeed his daughter.CM- Time and time again, he lost interest and went back to making his shoe, “In the midst of the action he went astray, and, with another deep sigh, fell to work at his shoemaking”. (Dickens 46) SD-Another way Dickens shows emotion is by using similies.CM- Dickens states, “His cold white head mingled with her radiant hair, which warmed and lightened it as though it were the light of freedom”.(Dickens 48) This nice sentence proves that Lucie Manette’s dad may still remember her.SD Lastly, Dickens displays emotion by using repetition which is an extremely powerful tool.CM- In an effort to make her dad remember her, she repeats some of the most powerful words in the book, “weep for it, weep for it”. (Dickens 48) CS-Lucie Manette is in a very tough situation, filled with years of crying, filled with years of tears, too much information to absorb, but now, tears of joy, how in the world does Dickens explain this anomalous event so perfectly.

TS- After twenty years of believing my parents were dead, and then have a stranger come up to me and say they are alive, I would have mixed emotions. SD- My first emotion would be shock and disbelief that they are still alive. CM- Knowing they were alive would release a wave of happiness that would completely consume me. CM- I think most people would be completely taken back in shock if their parents that supposedly died twenty years ago are still alive. SD- After I had finally taken in the situation, I would be mad. CM-Missing twenty years of fun memories with my parents would get me angry. CM- All I would be able to think about is all the great times we could of had, and how somebody stole those moments away from me. SD- Since I haven’t seen them in twenty years, my last emotion would be anxiousness. CM-Waiting to reunite with them after all that time would be harder than falling asleep on Christmas Eve. CM- I don’t know how I could function through the day knowing I would soon see my thought to be dead parents. CS I would be in shock that my parents were still alive, a rush of anger would flash into me, mad at the person that stole them from me, robbing me of precious memories that could have been, drowning me in anxiousness, and holding me back from seeing my parents.

If someone came to you and said your parents that died 20 years ago are still alive, what would you do? Would you jump up in excitement, or be shocked with surprise? All these emotions were running through Lucie Manette when she learned her father was still alive.

Self Assessment- I think I did good on this essay because I worked hard and checked over my writing numerous times. I believe, since I took my time, and carefully checked my work, I will have no mistakes. My week point that I need to work on is my commas. I still struggle on finding out where to put them. I think I deserve a B- for this essay.

martha's vineyard

Sam Godfrey

English

Mr. Salsich

10/11/10

Martha’s Vineyard: A Trip To Remember

Day 1- Today started off very slow. The bus ride was by far the worst ride of my life. First, the bus was completely full, so there were two kids per seat. Second, it was very hot and sticky. Lastly, I couldn’t fit all the way in the seat. After the torturous ride, we arrived at Woods Hole Aquarium. The seals and other fish exhibits were extremely interesting and informational. After that we arrived at Woods Hole Oceanographic Museum. This place was very nice and was very informational. Watching the short film about “Alvin” was very interesting, even though we had already heard about it. The highpoint of the day was the ferry ride. Being on the deck with the wind and rain burning my face felt really nice, I really look forward to the ferry ride back home. After a long day of traveling and visiting museums, it was nice to get back and play an intense game of chess with Jeff. I can’t wait for dinner.

POEM- The ferry abruptly jerks into gear, sending me forward with a slight nudge. As the ferry gains speed I make my way to the bow of the boat. I am one of the few to venture out into the cold raw weather. The fierce wind and piercing water stings my face. I have never felt so good.

Day 2-Today was a very fun day filled with adventure. Our first stop of the day was at Felix Neck. I truly enjoyed drawing a picture of a spotted turtle. Learning about different eco-systems was fun too. After our time inside we left the comfort of the facility to go out into the pouring rain. Since I had my rain jacket on I had a lot of fun. Next, we headed back to the hostile for lunch and a lesson on glaciers. After our lunch and lesson we headed out to Long Pound. The Long Pond dirt road was filled with very deep puddles. At one point the water was over the hood of the bus. After a quick walk out to the beach we saw a seal. It felt nice to be out on the ocean with the salty sea breeze.

Hykoo- It is pouring rain,

I am soaked to the bare bone

I am really cold.

POEM-The wind is whipping. The sand is flying. And the waves are crashing, showing their power, daring me to step in. One wave comes slamming down, sending a cloud of salty spray onto my face, roaring just like thunder.

Day 3- Today was our last day, and one of the best. We first went out to Poly Hill Arboretum where we learned about trees from around the world. I found it super interesting that Poly grew trees from all over Asia, and South America. After that we went out for a nice slice of pizza. Next, we went out to Oak Bluffs town where we had the chance to shop and eat ice cream. Finally, we headed out to Aquinnah. At Aquinnah we learned about the bluffs and how they were formed. Then we watched a nice sunset. Although it was cold and windy it was a nice trip. This adventure to Martha’s Vineyard was super fun!

POEM- I am small.

I am small compared to the massive clay cliffs. They tower above me, peering down into my eyes. They hold firm and steady in the harsh elements. I am small compared to the ocean. This mighty force of nature pounds and pulls the ground. As I look down the beach the ocean seems to be filled with diamonds. I am small compared to the brightly lit sky. Hundreds of color shades light up the coast, warming my face. I am small.

Essay 3

Sam

English

Mr. Salsich

9/28/10

My Favorite:

An Essay About My Passions

TS-My favorite place to spend my time is at one of the most dangerous: the river. It is a place that can be enjoyable, but also a place that can keep you on your toes. It is a place that can be relaxing, but also a place that can kill you. It is the river.

TS-The river is where I am most at home, big or small, deep or shallow. SD- As soon as I make my way into the river, the water raps its arms around my waist. CM- The cold refreshing water always finds a way to rejuvenate me, and restore all my energy. CM- Whenever I feel stale or lethargic, I immediately go to the water; so it can work its magic. SD- The currents are always welcoming, but they keep me on guard. CM-The currents also provide a plentiful supply of fish; which I find irresistible not to catch. CM- The currents can be fun, but they are also a brawny force of nature. SD- The river valley can be deep and intimidating, like the drop off from a cliff. CM- They are steep and rugged, shimmering in the river's spray as the current rips by, baking in the intense heat of the day, daring me to climb down and not slip, holding steady and firm like a statue.(40 words) CM- Sometimes, I think nothing can break their form, whatever is hurled at them they can still stay strong. CS- The river is a place where some of natures strongest forces come together to form a place of shear power.

TS- When I am bored, my fishing pole always brings me something to do. SD- During the long summer days my fishing pole is the only thing that can save me from my boredom. CM- I have found that going out on the boat to fish is much more entertaining than sitting in front of a television. CM- Just being out on the water trying to trick a fish into biting your lure, never gets old. SD- My fishing pole opens up many gateways to entertainment. CM-If it wasn’t for my fishing pole, I would hardly be outside on the water. CM- Instead, I would end up inside moping around with nothing to do. SD- Furthermore, my fishing pole delivers me food. CM- Fishing has provided food for people for hundreds of years. CM- Fresh fish is one of my family's favorite meals. CS-Without a fishing pole, my summer days would be extremely slow and boring. Not to mention I would be very hungry.

Being on the river is my favorite thing in the world. These two necessities play a huge roll in my life. Instead of sitting on the couch, I am out fishing on the river. I feel fishing has enriched my life with nature, happiness and excitement. Being outside on the river, with a rod in my hand, is my true love and passion.

I think I did alright on this essay. The only thing that concerns me is my commas. During this essay I kept second guessing myself as to where and place the commas. I think i really need to work on this. Otherwise, I thought my ideas were well planned out, and fit me perfectly. I would give this essay a C+.

Essay 2

Sam

English

Mr. Salsich

9/22/10

Truly Knowing Somebody:

An Essay About Never Truly Knowing Someone

There are always those certain secrets I will share with my friends, but there are a few that stay locked up inside me and will never come out. Everyone keeps certain things to just themselves Therefore, you never completely know your friends. Charles Dickens the author of, “A Tale of Two Cities”, states this same theory. Can Dickens be right?

TS- Is it possible that my family and best friends don’t truly know me? SD- According to Dickens, nobody truly knows each other, “that every beating heart in the hundreds of thousands of breasts there, is, some of its imaginings, a secret to the heart nearest it!” CM- Let it be your mom or dad, you truly don’t know somebody. CM- Every beating heart that sits next to you holds a deep secret or trait that is impossible to discover, except by the person themself.SD- It takes too long to, beyond doubt, know somebody, “No more can I turn the leaves of this dear book that I once loved, and vainly hope in time to read it all”. CM-In plain English, there isn’t enough time on earth to get to know somebody. This one lifetime is a fraction of the time it takes to read somebody’s entire book.(appositive) CM- Just when you thought you finally have someone figured out, you learn something new about a person. CS- I have always thought I knew my best friend like the back of my palm, until I read what Dickens had to say.

TS-Something that can relate to Dickens’ belief about not truly knowing someone is a box of chocolates. SD- When you eat a box of chocolates you never know what you are going to get. CM-A person is filled with secrets and mysteries, just like a box of chocolates is filled with all different kinds of flavors. CM-My favorite part of eating chocolates is the wide variety of flavors, and my favorite part of a human is discovering new secrets.SD-As my friendship grows with my friends, I sporadically learn new secrets and traits I have never seen before CM- If you eat enough chocolate, you will discover new flavors you never tasted before.CM-Even though every now and then you find a new flavor, you can never discover them all, there’s simply not enough time.SD-Sometimes it’s better to savor the chocolates and eat them slow instead of rushing. CM-By eating them slow you will not get sick of them, instead you will enjoy every bite.CM-Furthermore, you never want to rush a friendship and figure out too many secrets too fast, or it will become dull. CS-Getting to know somebody can be a delicate process, but it can also be delicious like eating a box of chocolate.

After hearing Dickens’ thoughts, I too believe his theory. Once I thought about what he said, it made complete sense. Relating this thought to a box of chocolates also helped see his point. A person is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you’re going to get.

Essay #1

Essay #1
Sam
Mr. Salsich
English
September 14, 2010

End of Summer, Beginning of School:
A Essay About The Start of A New Year

Have you ever felt that your bed is always comfier on a school morning? I get this feeling every Monday morning before school. I think the song and movie I chose explain this feeling perfectly.

TS- For me, the song that marks the end of summer is “Monday Monday”, by the Mamas and the Papas. SD- This song is very interesting because it can take on two meanings, depending on the time of year. CM- In the midst of summer, I love Mondays. However, when school is in session, and summer has ended, Monday takes on a new meaning. CM- During the beginning of summer this song has a nice calming tone to it, “Monday Monday so good to me”. But, when school comes around, it inherits a gloomy feeling, “Monday Monday can’t trust that day”. SD- After the summer has run its course, there is that one dreadful Monday that marks the end of summer. CM- The Mamas and the Papas sing, “When that Monday comes you can find me crying”. When that Monday morning rolls around, millions of kids, including myself, wake up with a puddle of tears on their pillow. CS-That Monday marks the end to freedom. That Monday marks the end of fun. That Monday marks the end of summer. That Monday is Labor Day. (parallelism)

TS- When school starts, clicks form, trouble starts, and kids come together. SD-The movie, “ The Breakfast Club”, resembles one side of school besides football nights, dances, and studying. It resembles “A brain, a beauty, a jock, a misfit, and a criminal”, who come together in detention. CM- The first week of school has ended and already five kids with different personalities are in a Saturday detention. CM- These kids are from every click possible, ranging from the geeks to jocks. CM- In an eight hour day, this unique group of kids realize, they have more in common than they thought. SD- The whole movie takes place in a school library with a passive dictator as the school faculty who monitors them. CM- Throughout the movie, they sneak through the whole school playing basketball, roaming the hallways, and rough housing in the library. CM- All of the scenery in this movie brings a back to school feeling to me. CS-Saturday finally ended, uniting clicks, creating respect for one another, and all were glad for that detention after all. (Participle)

Finding a movie and a song that relates to the end of summer and beginning of the school year was tricky. I believe that the song and movie I chose showed these connections very well. Everybody hates getting out of bed on a Monday to go work. Everybody hates going back to school and seeing classrooms and lockers.

Self Assessment- I think I did relatively well on this essay. I checked it over countless times and followed the advice that my partners gave me. I particularly like my song about Monday. That chunk flowed very nicely I thought. I did have some trouble with my last paragraph. It felt like the paragraph didn’t relate the movie to the beginning of school very well. For my next essay I will think extra hard about my topics so they are good ones.

5/20/10

English

My Top Sentences

1) One must be accountable for their actions; one must realize that decisions have consequences; one must live with the outcome. I think this is one of my best sentences this year because it is very clear and strait forward, there is no confusion in this line. 3/10/10

2) It's what's inside that counts, it's what's inside that matters, it's what's inside that's true. I really like this sentence because its meaning is true and important; it states what is really important about a person. 10/21/09

3) -I am shy, there is no denying this, but I continuously try to conquer my timidness everyday. I feel this sentence is one of my best because it clearly describes my personality the most. It states the truth. 10/20/09

4)The evening news always seems to find the bad in the world, “I make my living off the evening news, just give me something –something I can use. People love it when you lose, they love dirty laundry. –Don Henley) 5/6/10 English Mr.Salsich Finding the Good: A Response to Valentine for Ernest Mann.

“This is by far one of my favorite sentences out of all my essays this year because of the quote by Don Henley . I think it described the theme of finding the beauty in something perceived to be ugly; I think the quote was blended in nicely.”

5) People like the Ewells who were so dishonest, so cruel, so evil, are hard to forgive. (Tricolon) 3/10/10

English Mr. Salsich Forgiveness: A Hard Thing To Do

“I especially like this sentence because of the purposeful and meaning tricolon. I like the way this sentence flows with no error or quirks.”

6) I must say, I was scared to be captured or killed, but was more afraid to be forgotten. Thursday, February 25, 2010

After carefully reading over this sentence I concluded it was worthy of one of my best because of its uniqueness. This sentences sums up a whole essay assignment in eighteen words, and really cuts to the meaning of the paper without sugarcoating it.

I’ve learned that when I sit inside and watch T.V all day, I feel stale and lethargic, but once outside in the fresh air, I feel refreshed. 5/17/2010 This I Believe : A essay about the Outdoors I really like this sentence because of its long lenth and the words I used. I feel my word choise was very apropeate for the sentence.

Just being outside, just being in fresh air, just being active, feels great.(alliteration) 5/17/2010 This I Believe : A essay about the Outdoors , I think this sentence deserves the tittle of “Best Sentences” because of it’s great example of alliteration. I feel this sentence is one of my very strongest this whole year.

CM-I am a calm river, not fast, and no rapids, just taking my time. Wednesday, December 9, 2009

To Kill A Mocking Bird: Metaphors Sam 12/9/09

I really like this sentence because it displays a very nice metaphor that I took my time writing and blending into the paper.

Paris, a wealthy, handsome man, is trying to hurry love, but he will just have to wait.

4/8/10 English Mr. Salsich You Can’t Hurry Love: You Will Just Have To Wait

I think this sentence deserves a spot in my top 10 favorite sentences because it is a excellent example of appositive. It is clear and really flows nicely without any awkward spots.

Sam

5/17/2010

English

Mr. Salsich

This I Believe :

A essay about the Outdoors

My strongest belief is for people to spend as much time as possible outside. When you spend time outside in the fresh air you, feel refreshed. Instead of sitting inside feeling stale, you could be outside enjoying the enviorment and stay fit.

TS-I personally benefit in many ways from the outdoors. SD- When I go outside and participate in activities, I always feel rejuvenated (apt Thesaurus Word). CM- I’ve learned that when I sit inside and watch T.V all day, I feel stale and lethargic, but once outside in the fresh air, I feel refreshed. CM-I don't know why somebody would choose to feel stagnant over feeling refreshed. SD- When people are exercising instead of sitting on the couch, they become healthier. CM-With physical activities you are getting exercise that will prevent you from obesity, and disease. CM- It is sad to think that some people sit inside all day, wasting away their life when they could be outside. SD-Being outside exercising is also very fun and amusing. CM-One activity that I like to do outside is play sports, such as lacrosse. I find that sports are the best way to have fun while receiving a lot of physical activity. CS- Just being outside, just being in fresh air, just being active, feels great.(alliteration)

The outdoors has enriched my life with fishing, sports, and biking, etc. When someone is physically active they are becoming physically healthy which does not happen while watching a T.V. The outdoors enhances someone’s well being both mentally and physically unlike sedentary(apt Thesaurus Word) indoor lifestyle.

Self Assessment-

I think I did very well on this essay. I spent a lot of time checking it over and making sure it flows nicely. I really like my belief about being out side, because it relates a lot to me. I think I could have spent some more time on my opening and closing paragraph. It sounds like it was rushed. I also think I should lengthen my sentences some more, they are pretty short. I think I deserve a B- on this essay.

Sam

5/6/10

English

Mr.Salsich

Finding The Good:

A Response to Valentine for Ernest Mann

People in general tend to overlook the good in life and exploit the bad. Being a positive person is a strong characteristic. Instead of following the crowd and doing what other people do, break away from the back and do what you feel is right.

TS-Just because the world and media say something is ugly, doesn’t mean it is ugly- and doesn’t mean it is boring and doesn’t mean it is bad .SD- In the poem Valentine for Ernest Mann, a husband gave his wife a pair of skunks for Valentines. CM- She obviously did not like them because she only saw the negative in the skunks.CM- The husband was confused about why she hated them, “I thought they had such beautiful eyes”, replied her husband. The husband saw beyond the ego a skunk carries, instead he discovered the diamond under the rough. SD-Another false conception(apt thesaurus word) is the way rain gets a bad wrap. CM- The weather man and people are always judging rainy days to be cold, raw, and revolting(apt thesaurus word) . Ironically rain has a very important role in life. Without it, man, earth, plants, and animals would not survive. SD- School is another perfect example that supports the theme, “nothing is ugly just because the world says so”. CM-Most kids find school to be a daunting task. CM- However, school gives you an education for a good future. CS- I found the quote about the skunk very interesting; it made me think how something with a negative reputation, can be so beautiful.

TS-My life can be related to the poem Valentine for Ernest Mann, because I have, and appreciate so many things that most people don’t see the value in. SD-Today in this generation there are only a handful of people who enjoy listening to country music. CM-Kids now a days mainly listen to rap, hip hop, and heavy metal, not country. CM-They all think it is dull, old, disgusting. Unlike them, I enjoy and listen to country music and see the meaning in the lyrics .SD-Before I came to Pine Point School all of my friends were very upset that I was leaving them for a private school. CM-They all thought private schools were horrible, boring, extremely strict, and hard.CM- What they don’t know is, Pine Point and all independent schools offer the best education possible which I welcome with open arms. SD`- When I first went to the New London Soup Kitchen for my service project, I expected it to be a grimy (apt thesaurus word) old run down kitchen filled with people dressed in rags. CM- For so long I had believed this because, “the world said so”. CM- Right when I walked through the doors I realized the kitchen was an amazing place that helped out the homeless. -Often in life we automatically label something that we think is bad-, but we really don’t understand that we are judging what we don’t truly know.

The evening news always seems to find the bad in the world, “I make my living off the evening news, just give me something –something I can use. People love it when you lose, they love dirty laundry. –Don Henley) Just how the wife in Valentine for Ernest Man couldn't find the good in the skunks, the news can’t find the good in the world.

Self Assessment- I still feel that my sentences are short and do not have enough detail. I continue to work on this problem with each essay I write. I think I weeded out the extra words pretty well so my whole essay makes sense. Also, I believe my usage of quotes was well done. I think I would give myself a c+ or b- on this essay.