Sam

5/17/2010

English

Mr. Salsich

This I Believe :

A essay about the Outdoors

My strongest belief is for people to spend as much time as possible outside. When you spend time outside in the fresh air you, feel refreshed. Instead of sitting inside feeling stale, you could be outside enjoying the enviorment and stay fit.

TS-I personally benefit in many ways from the outdoors. SD- When I go outside and participate in activities, I always feel rejuvenated (apt Thesaurus Word). CM- I’ve learned that when I sit inside and watch T.V all day, I feel stale and lethargic, but once outside in the fresh air, I feel refreshed. CM-I don't know why somebody would choose to feel stagnant over feeling refreshed. SD- When people are exercising instead of sitting on the couch, they become healthier. CM-With physical activities you are getting exercise that will prevent you from obesity, and disease. CM- It is sad to think that some people sit inside all day, wasting away their life when they could be outside. SD-Being outside exercising is also very fun and amusing. CM-One activity that I like to do outside is play sports, such as lacrosse. I find that sports are the best way to have fun while receiving a lot of physical activity. CS- Just being outside, just being in fresh air, just being active, feels great.(alliteration)

The outdoors has enriched my life with fishing, sports, and biking, etc. When someone is physically active they are becoming physically healthy which does not happen while watching a T.V. The outdoors enhances someone’s well being both mentally and physically unlike sedentary(apt Thesaurus Word) indoor lifestyle.

Self Assessment-

I think I did very well on this essay. I spent a lot of time checking it over and making sure it flows nicely. I really like my belief about being out side, because it relates a lot to me. I think I could have spent some more time on my opening and closing paragraph. It sounds like it was rushed. I also think I should lengthen my sentences some more, they are pretty short. I think I deserve a B- on this essay.