Essay 9 outline

Out Line

Bell word-depressed

Paragraph 1

Carton is one of the most dynamic characters

He is a very sad and depressed man

Has a drinking problem

Needs to get some help.

Paragraph 2

TS- Carton is described many times, mostly negative

SD-"useless [...] piece of furniture, tolerated for its old service, and taken no notice of."

CM- Harsh simile to describe Carton

CM-It may be blunt, but its true in some ways

SD-“ Mr. Carton, who had so long sat looking at the ceiling of the court, changed neither his place nor his attitude, even in this excitement”.

CM-Carton is a person who isn’t affected by excitement

CM- He just sits there, not moving, stuck in his own world

SD- “I am a disappointed drudge, sir. I care for no man on earth, and no man on earth cares for me.”

CM-Carton has no self confidence

CM- He is depressed and has a drinking problem

CS- Carton is a depressed drunk, who needs a boost of self confidence

Paragraph 3

TS-To get Carton back to a healthy state, he needs to follow some steps

SD- Stop drinking

CM- Drinking is main root to his problems

CM- If he would stop, no more depression

SD-Needs to stop feeling bad for himself

CM- Needs to get some self confidence,[..]” Maybe we should chug on over to mamby pamby land where maybe we can find some self confidence for you”[..](R. Lee Ermey, Geico commercial)

CM- He has a fine life, he needs to find self confidence

SD- Lastly, you should not work with Stryver

CM-Stryver only degrades you more

CM-He is the worst person to be around

CS- Carton needs to follow these steps

Paragraph 4

I think if Carton stops drinking he will be fine

He needs to change around his daily life

May have to make a few sacrifices

Sam

12/14/10

English

Mr. Salsich

Cartons Hidden Skeletons:

An Essay about Carton and His Problems

Sydney Carton is one of the most dynamic characters in the book A Tale of Two Cities. He is a sad and depressed man that doesn’t carry his head high. Carton also has a drinking problem which is one main reason he is such a wreck. Carton needs to seek help and change his unhealthy lifestyle as soon as he can.

TS-Throughout the book, Carton the man with many problems, has mainly been described in downbeat and depressing ways(alliteration).(appositive) SD- Carton is always the person that is never liked by others, he is like a “Useless piece of furniture, tolerated for its old service and taken no notice of”. (Dickens)CM-This comment made by Darnay to describe Carton is a pretty harsh comment that was not needed that hurt Carton, that should not have been said.(polysyndeton CM- His comment may be blunt, but it’s the truth. SD-Carton is the type of person that is like a stone statue, “Mr. Carton, who had so long sat looking at the ceiling of the court, altered(fast) neither his place nor his attitude, even in this excitement”. CM- Even in the mitts of exhilaration(fast) Carton is the type of person who isn’t affected. CM- He just sits there, not moving, stuck in his own world. SD- Lastly, Carton has no self confidence, “I am a disappointed drudge, sir. I care for no man on earth, and no man on earth cares for me”. This quote proves that Carton has no self confidence. Because of his low self confidence he is a miserable man(alliteration) who has a drinking problem. CS- Carton is a dejected drunk who needs a boost of self confidence.

TS- To get Carton back to a healthy state, he should follow some simple steps.(Alliteration) SD-First off, Carton needs to stop drinking. CM-Drinking is what gets him into his depressed moods, drinking is the main root to all his problems, drinking is destroying his life. CM- If he would stop drinking he would start to feel better, his misery would go away, and he would become healthier.. SD- Furthermore, Carton needs to stop feeling bad for himself and gain some self confidence. CM- Finding some poise(fast) shouldn’t be a big deal for a grown man, [..]”Maybe we should chug on over to mamby pamby land where maybe we can find some self confidence for you”[..](R. Lee Ermey, Geico Commercial) CM-If Carton heard this line I am sure he would stumble upon some self confidence.(Alliteration) SD- Another way carton can get back to a healthy state is by not working with Stryver. Stryver only talks Carton down, filling his head with disheartening comments, making him feel worse about himself, like a drill sergeant breaks down his men.(Coordinate Cumulative With Simile) CM- When Carton is with Stryver he rapidly (fast) looses all his pride, after all he is the jackal. CS- These adjustments would be very difficult for him to follow, and would take some time, and would be hard work, but after some time Carton would be a transformed person.(polysyndeton)

I believe if Carton would just stop drinking he would be a healthy energetic person that everybody enjoys to be around. He desperately needs to make some changes in his daily life. Along with making changes he will have to make some sacrifices as well, like drinking.

I think I did very well on essay 9. This could be my best essay of the year so far. I checked it over coutless times to make sure there were no errors. I carefully thought out each sentence and carefully blended the quotes. I think on the essay I deserve a B.

Sam
11/16/10
Mr. Salsich
English
Essay 8 outline
Paragraph #1
HOOK- How can a person split a ray of light?
CM-Or how does a whole world lie in a twinkling star?
CM-Thinking the way Dickens did, can be tricky business
Thesis- In this difficult writing there is many meanings
Paragraph #2
TS- This paragraph is extremely confusing and difficult to read, but it is filled with great meaning.
SD- This world is huge, (quote about France compared to sky)
CM- The sky is enormous; France is a small sliver of it
CM-This indicates that Dickens was comparing things
TS-I think the main point of the paragraph is, the world is huge, what’s beyond it is even bigger, us humans are not nearly as intelligent as we should be
CM- If France is a sliver of the sky, then the earth is just a twinkling star in all of space
CM- If the earth is just small sliver of space, then we most likely are not the most intelligent, (quote about human knowledge)
Echo- signify, indicate
Paragraph #3
TS- Paragraph has a lot of advice and meaning behind it
SD- The idea about not knowing everything
CM- Some people think they know everything, but they are 1 in 7 billion people
CM-They are a blade of grass in a field
SD- I often find myself in my own world
CM- But there is much more to Mystic, Connecticut
CM-I cant wait to expand my world and step out of my box
Paragraph #4
I think people get to wrapped up in their own lives
They don’t know what else is out there
It doesn’t matter if its around the country, world, space, people need to broaden their lives.

Sam

11/29/10

English

Mr. Salsich

What Lies Beyond:

An Essay On a Paragraph Dickens Wrote

Have you ever wondered what is beyond earth? What else could possibly be out in space? I think these questions are some of the most baffling. Space is huge and earth is a minute piece of it.

The paragraph on page 183 in Tale of Two Cities, is possibly one of the most puzzling. SD- This world is huge: “Thousands of acres of land- a whole province of France- all of France itself- lay under the night sky, concentrated into faint hair-breadth line."(Dickens, pg 183)CM- Dickens is saying, the sky is enormous and France is a small sliver and in the bigger picture, earth is a small sliver of the colossal(fast) universe. SD- The main point of the paragraph was that we humans are too big for our britches. CM- If France is just a sliver of the sky, than earth is just a twinkling star in a huge universe. CM- I think the human race thinks they are so smart and ahead of our time, “And as mere human knowledge can split a ray of light and analyze the manner of its composition, so sublime intelligences may read in feeble shining of this earth of ours”.(appositive) CS- Overall, the world is big, we humans are smart, but space is massive, there are bound to be more advanced planets.

This paragraph relates to my life and the world of 2010. SD- The idea about not knowing everything applies not only to the paragraph but my life as well. CM- Some people think they know everything, but they are one in seven billion people. CM- They are like a blade of grass in a massive field. SD-I often find myself in my own minute(fast) world, oblivious to what is around me. CM- However, there is much more than Mystic, Connecticut. CM- I can’t wait to expand my world, step out of my box, and expand my knowledge of the world.(coordinate) CS-Its human nature to assume(fast) you’re superior, but you can never be the best; there are just too many people.

Just like France is a small sliver of earth, earth is a small sliver of space. We humans have no clue what else lies out in that dark endless hole we call space. If there is life on other planets we humans are most likely not the most advanced. So what is beyond earth? This question will linger in my head for some time.

Graphic Organizer for Essay 7

Peace Opening-

1- What does peace mean to you?

2- Peace can mean many different things to many different people all around the world.

3- Possibly peace means, no fighting, or maybe being at peace with yourself.

4- Peace takes place in TOTC, a poem, and your own life

What Peace Means to Me-

1- Peace takes on many shapes and forms in my personal life

2- A place I always find peace is my ipod

3- At night my music carries me away from troubles

4- While listening I am at peace with myself

5- Peace also means no war and violence

6- If people would drop their weapons and jump on the peace train we would all be home soon

7- There is too much hate and anger in the world

8- Lastly, I can find peace when I am happy

9- Finding happiness in life is key to bringing peace

10- When I am at home with my friends and family having a fun time

11- Peace can be achieved not only by yourself, but by the world

Peace in TOTC

1- In book TOTC not much peace

2- However, Lucy being reunited with Dr. Manette

3- They were truly happy

4- Peace can be achieved through pure happiness

5- Also, the Marquis being killed

6- No more suffering for poor

7- This dictator that harmed the people is gone

8- Lastly, Carton is a pretty good example of piece

9- Despite his extremely low self confidence he is a extremely laid back guy

10- He is not pushy and cocky like Stryver, he just lets stuff roll off his back

11- Even in this dark book peace can be found

1- In my life and in TOTC peace can be found

2- It can come in many different shapes and forms

3- In time I think the world and TOTC will hopefully find peace

Sam

11/3/2010

English

Mr. Salsich

An Essay about Peace:

In My Life and Tale of Two Cities

What does peace mean to you? Peace can mean many different things to many different people. Possibly peace means no fighting, or possibly it means being at peace with yourself. Peace takes place in my own life, A Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning.

Peace takes on many shapes and forms in my life. A place I can always find peace is at night when I listen to my ipod. Music always finds a way to carry me away from the troubles of the day. When I am listening to my ipod-- I am calm and have no worries.(Verb Appositive) I am at peace with myself. Peace could also mean no wars and violence in the world. If humans could all drop their weapons and jump on the peace train, we would all be home soon. There is too much hate and anger in the world for no reason. Because of all the violence and hate, innocent people have to suffer. Lastly, I can always find peace outside; whether it’s the beach, mountains, or the river. (appositive) Being outside and away from everyday problems is a great way for me to find peace. Finding peace with myself can sometimes be a difficult thing, always trying to find ways to escape my dilemmas, digging deep for a little sanity, like a oil drill digs for oil. (cumulative sentence with a metaphor.)

In the book Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning, there really isn’t too much peace. However, Lucy being reunited with Dr. Manette is a great example of peace. When father and daughter were reunited after twenty years they were both truly happy--embarrassing each other in their arms.(Verb Appositive) According to the Dalai Lama, peace can be achieved through happiness. Also, the Marquis being killed can be perceived as an example of peace. The Marquis being murdered wasn’t peaceful, but because he died there will be no more suffering for the poor. This appalling (thesaurus word) dictator had harmed innocent people for years. Lastly, in the poem, A Rainy Morning, peace can be found in the lady. Even though this lady is in a wheel chair she is at peace with herself. She is not harming anyone, and she is not mad at the way she is. In my life, Tale of Two Cities, and A Rainy Morning, peace can be found in the rarest places.

In order for the world to be a safe and peaceful place, people need to find happiness. Why must people fight over things not worth fighting for? Start off by finding peace in your own life, finds a place where you are tranquil, find a place where you are calm, find a place where you are truly happy.

I think this is one of my better essays. I really took the time to check it over for mistakes. I am hoping I do not have one grammatical errors. I also tried my best on the special sentences. I feel I have met the requirements for them. Overall I took my time, and carefully thought out each sentences. I think I deserve a B- for this essay.