5/20/10

English

My Top Sentences

1) One must be accountable for their actions; one must realize that decisions have consequences; one must live with the outcome. I think this is one of my best sentences this year because it is very clear and strait forward, there is no confusion in this line. 3/10/10

2) It's what's inside that counts, it's what's inside that matters, it's what's inside that's true. I really like this sentence because its meaning is true and important; it states what is really important about a person. 10/21/09

3) -I am shy, there is no denying this, but I continuously try to conquer my timidness everyday. I feel this sentence is one of my best because it clearly describes my personality the most. It states the truth. 10/20/09

4)The evening news always seems to find the bad in the world, “I make my living off the evening news, just give me something –something I can use. People love it when you lose, they love dirty laundry. –Don Henley) 5/6/10 English Mr.Salsich Finding the Good: A Response to Valentine for Ernest Mann.

“This is by far one of my favorite sentences out of all my essays this year because of the quote by Don Henley . I think it described the theme of finding the beauty in something perceived to be ugly; I think the quote was blended in nicely.”

5) People like the Ewells who were so dishonest, so cruel, so evil, are hard to forgive. (Tricolon) 3/10/10

English Mr. Salsich Forgiveness: A Hard Thing To Do

“I especially like this sentence because of the purposeful and meaning tricolon. I like the way this sentence flows with no error or quirks.”

6) I must say, I was scared to be captured or killed, but was more afraid to be forgotten. Thursday, February 25, 2010

After carefully reading over this sentence I concluded it was worthy of one of my best because of its uniqueness. This sentences sums up a whole essay assignment in eighteen words, and really cuts to the meaning of the paper without sugarcoating it.

I’ve learned that when I sit inside and watch T.V all day, I feel stale and lethargic, but once outside in the fresh air, I feel refreshed. 5/17/2010 This I Believe : A essay about the Outdoors I really like this sentence because of its long lenth and the words I used. I feel my word choise was very apropeate for the sentence.

Just being outside, just being in fresh air, just being active, feels great.(alliteration) 5/17/2010 This I Believe : A essay about the Outdoors , I think this sentence deserves the tittle of “Best Sentences” because of it’s great example of alliteration. I feel this sentence is one of my very strongest this whole year.

CM-I am a calm river, not fast, and no rapids, just taking my time. Wednesday, December 9, 2009

To Kill A Mocking Bird: Metaphors Sam 12/9/09

I really like this sentence because it displays a very nice metaphor that I took my time writing and blending into the paper.

Paris, a wealthy, handsome man, is trying to hurry love, but he will just have to wait.

4/8/10 English Mr. Salsich You Can’t Hurry Love: You Will Just Have To Wait

I think this sentence deserves a spot in my top 10 favorite sentences because it is a excellent example of appositive. It is clear and really flows nicely without any awkward spots.

Sam

5/17/2010

English

Mr. Salsich

This I Believe :

A essay about the Outdoors

My strongest belief is for people to spend as much time as possible outside. When you spend time outside in the fresh air you, feel refreshed. Instead of sitting inside feeling stale, you could be outside enjoying the enviorment and stay fit.

TS-I personally benefit in many ways from the outdoors. SD- When I go outside and participate in activities, I always feel rejuvenated (apt Thesaurus Word). CM- I’ve learned that when I sit inside and watch T.V all day, I feel stale and lethargic, but once outside in the fresh air, I feel refreshed. CM-I don't know why somebody would choose to feel stagnant over feeling refreshed. SD- When people are exercising instead of sitting on the couch, they become healthier. CM-With physical activities you are getting exercise that will prevent you from obesity, and disease. CM- It is sad to think that some people sit inside all day, wasting away their life when they could be outside. SD-Being outside exercising is also very fun and amusing. CM-One activity that I like to do outside is play sports, such as lacrosse. I find that sports are the best way to have fun while receiving a lot of physical activity. CS- Just being outside, just being in fresh air, just being active, feels great.(alliteration)

The outdoors has enriched my life with fishing, sports, and biking, etc. When someone is physically active they are becoming physically healthy which does not happen while watching a T.V. The outdoors enhances someone’s well being both mentally and physically unlike sedentary(apt Thesaurus Word) indoor lifestyle.

Self Assessment-

I think I did very well on this essay. I spent a lot of time checking it over and making sure it flows nicely. I really like my belief about being out side, because it relates a lot to me. I think I could have spent some more time on my opening and closing paragraph. It sounds like it was rushed. I also think I should lengthen my sentences some more, they are pretty short. I think I deserve a B- on this essay.

Sam

5/6/10

English

Mr.Salsich

Finding The Good:

A Response to Valentine for Ernest Mann

People in general tend to overlook the good in life and exploit the bad. Being a positive person is a strong characteristic. Instead of following the crowd and doing what other people do, break away from the back and do what you feel is right.

TS-Just because the world and media say something is ugly, doesn’t mean it is ugly- and doesn’t mean it is boring and doesn’t mean it is bad .SD- In the poem Valentine for Ernest Mann, a husband gave his wife a pair of skunks for Valentines. CM- She obviously did not like them because she only saw the negative in the skunks.CM- The husband was confused about why she hated them, “I thought they had such beautiful eyes”, replied her husband. The husband saw beyond the ego a skunk carries, instead he discovered the diamond under the rough. SD-Another false conception(apt thesaurus word) is the way rain gets a bad wrap. CM- The weather man and people are always judging rainy days to be cold, raw, and revolting(apt thesaurus word) . Ironically rain has a very important role in life. Without it, man, earth, plants, and animals would not survive. SD- School is another perfect example that supports the theme, “nothing is ugly just because the world says so”. CM-Most kids find school to be a daunting task. CM- However, school gives you an education for a good future. CS- I found the quote about the skunk very interesting; it made me think how something with a negative reputation, can be so beautiful.

TS-My life can be related to the poem Valentine for Ernest Mann, because I have, and appreciate so many things that most people don’t see the value in. SD-Today in this generation there are only a handful of people who enjoy listening to country music. CM-Kids now a days mainly listen to rap, hip hop, and heavy metal, not country. CM-They all think it is dull, old, disgusting. Unlike them, I enjoy and listen to country music and see the meaning in the lyrics .SD-Before I came to Pine Point School all of my friends were very upset that I was leaving them for a private school. CM-They all thought private schools were horrible, boring, extremely strict, and hard.CM- What they don’t know is, Pine Point and all independent schools offer the best education possible which I welcome with open arms. SD`- When I first went to the New London Soup Kitchen for my service project, I expected it to be a grimy (apt thesaurus word) old run down kitchen filled with people dressed in rags. CM- For so long I had believed this because, “the world said so”. CM- Right when I walked through the doors I realized the kitchen was an amazing place that helped out the homeless. -Often in life we automatically label something that we think is bad-, but we really don’t understand that we are judging what we don’t truly know.

The evening news always seems to find the bad in the world, “I make my living off the evening news, just give me something –something I can use. People love it when you lose, they love dirty laundry. –Don Henley) Just how the wife in Valentine for Ernest Man couldn't find the good in the skunks, the news can’t find the good in the world.

Self Assessment- I still feel that my sentences are short and do not have enough detail. I continue to work on this problem with each essay I write. I think I weeded out the extra words pretty well so my whole essay makes sense. Also, I believe my usage of quotes was well done. I think I would give myself a c+ or b- on this essay.