Sam
Essay #4
10/20/09
Throughout the day everybody finds themselves needing privacy. Privacy is something unavoidable. I personally love spending time by myself for a period of time during the day. It is a time I can relax and dive into my thoughts.
TS- To me the word privacy means the right to remain unnoticed and unidentified in the public. SD- In the book To Kill A Mocking Bird, Scout, Jem, and Dill all invaded Mr. Radley's privacy when they attempted to leave their note on his window. CM- Scout, Jem, and Dill are all very curious about Mr. Radley so they come up with a plan to leave a note on his window. The note was asking Mr.Radley to meet with them. CM- While attempting to leave the note Atticus caught them and told them firmly, "What Mr. Radley did was his own business. If he wanted to come out, he would."SD- Scout makes a point about privacy, asking how would we like it if people came barging in our life without asking? CM-When someone doesn't knock on my bedroom door I get very angry because that is my privacy. The closed door means I want to be left alone, just how Mr. Radley keeps his doors shut. SD- Lastly, it seems weird to Scout, Jem, and Dill and the rest of Maycomb that Mr. Radley stays inside all day and excludes himself from the public, but it may not seem weird to him. CM-It is not right for the kids to invade Mr.Radley's privacy because they thinks it is weird he stays inside all day. CM-The town of Maycomb loved being outside, Mr.Radley hated it. (antithesis) CS- In all, other peoples privacy should be respected by others, because when others invade my privacy I get very mad just like everybody else.
TS-In my life, privacy is a time for me to be invisible to others and to get lost in my own thoughts.SD-A time in my life when I wanted privacy was in my seventh grade chorus concert.CM- When I was on stage with many people staring up at me, I wanted to be left alone the most. All I wanted to do was run to the car and drive home, to totally escape the feeling of people staring at me.SD-Even though sometimes I must come out from underneath my shell, I find it hard when I am surrounded by strangers.CM-There is a fine balance between over exposure and underexposure. I tend to lean toward flying under the radar and trying to blend in with the crowd.SD-Everyday I try to step out of the box and try something that is not comfortable for me. CM-Let it be making a speech in front of people I am not familiar with, or simply talking to friends about my thoughts and feelings, I always make an effort to reach out .CM-I am shy, there is no denying this, but I continuously try to conquer my timidness everyday.(appositive closer)CS-As I stated before, there is a fine balance between overexposure and underexposure, but the challenge is to find the balancing point.
TS- Harper Lee, the author of To Kill A Mocking Bird,nicely describes how Mr. Radley likes his Privacy.CM- I can relate to Mr.Radley because I too like privacy.CM- I can also relate to Mr.Radley because he got upset when Jem peeked into his window, and I too would get upset if someone peeked in my room. The Constitution states, it is everyone's right to own private property. Our laws enforce privacy of ones land, hence "private property no trespassing" signs are so common. How would society be without the protection of one's privacy?
Wednesday, October 14, 2009
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Dear Sam,
ReplyDeleteYour examples are good and clear as always. I recommend that you read your first paragraph's TS very CAREFULLY. I still think you should read over your work more carefully because you have a few spelling and grammatical errors.
Sam, this is a sweet sentence: "In my life, privacy is a time for me to be invisible to others and to get lost in my own thoughts." GOOD WORK!
ReplyDeleteAlso, in your first paragraph, try to make your quote much shorter. In a short essay, it would be good to keep your quotes to less than one sentence. (Check some model essays for good examples of how to do this.)
GOOD LUCK!