Sam

4/20/10

English

Mr. Salsich

Family is Key:

My Family

In my life, family is a strong foundation. My family knows everything about me, what I like, what I want, what mood I am in. They are my comfort zone that I can always retreat to.

TS- When I think about my family, I feel a great deal of security. SD- I feel exceedingly(thesaurus word) blessed to have a whole family consisting of my mom, dad, and sister. CM-To know that my family cares about me, keeps me assured that I will have a listening ear when I need one. CM- My family is also a great support system when I hit a rough patch in life with school, sports, and friends.(parallelism) SD- Knowing I can be completely honest with family is a confidents builder. CM- In the beginning of my first year at Pine Point School, I was nervous about everything in general.CM- Knowing I could return to my refuge at the end of the day, helped me through this transition.SD-Just being in my sanctuary, surrounded by my family, I feel at ease and can surely sleep soundly.(alliteration) CM- It’s nice to have a place to relax and unwind.CM-Being at home with my family is where I am most content. CS- To have a home and a family that loves you, is priceless.

TS- The character, Atticus Finch, in the book To Kill a Mocking Bird, has strong correlations to my father. SD- Atticus and my dad are similar to one another because they are both fathers who set boundaries and enforce them. CM- My dad’s major limitation is no television or video games Sunday to Thursday. He is very strict on enforcing these rules just how Atticus is very strict about Scout not getting into fist fights. SD-Another analogous(thesaurus word) trait between Atticus and my dad is that both expose their kids to the world without sugarcoating the truth. CM- When Calpurnia told Scout and Jem not to go to Tom Robinson’s trial and they did, Atticus was not upset. He wanted his kids to know the truth about the real world and how cruel it can be. CM- Just like Atticus, my dad never hides the truth; he tells it how it is. CS- My dad and Atticus, are men of strong character, are willing to stand by their principles, and are willing to be honest.(loose sentence)

Let it be my dad, my whole family, or Atticus, family is a key factor in my life. Without a family, life can be very lonely and insecure. I can’t imagine waking up in the morning to an empty house filled with no love. Family is my support system that I can always turn to, it is my safety net.

Self Assessment- I think this is going to be one of my best essays. I have spent a lot of time on it and have checked it over countless times. Furthermore I completed all of the special requirements easily. I also display unity and clarity. My whole essay is under a umbrella that is easy to understand.